Autumn cameo.

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Written Language - Cameo

Learning Intention: I am learning how to use appropriate and effective similes in my cameo writing.

Success Criteria:

I am able to find and highlight similes in a cameo and explain why they work.

I am able to write appropriate similes for objects in my cameo.

Here is an example:

WINTER

Winter blows its cold breath everywhere.

The early morning frost greets you like being welcomed onto the marae.

The wind howls in the freezing air like a stray dog hungry for a bone.

Snowflakes flutter like leaves falling from autumn trees, covering the ground with a white sparkling blanket.

The trees become bare, brown bones standing like statues admiring the view.

Heavy rain falls from the sky like a thousand hooves pounding against the ground.

Chilly bitterness in the air, winter is here.

Here is my draft piece of writing!

Autumn

The leaves fall off the stale brown tree like a feather.

Leaves changing colours like orange, yellow and brown like kids colouring in.

Trees swaying in the invisible air like a blow of a child's breath.

Spider webs in the green wet grass like tangled string.

Skeleton leaves crystal clear like a ruby.

Wind twirls leaves around like a beautiful ballerina.

Leaves are falling on the ground, autumn is here.

Here is my published piece of writing.

Autumn

The leaves fall off the stale brown trees like feathers from birds.

Leaves changing colours to orange, yellow and brown like a rainbows.

Trees swaying in the invisible air like clothes on a washing line.

Spider webs lie in the green wet grass like tangled string.

Skeleton leaves crystal clear like a gem.

Wind twirls leaves around like a beautiful ballerina.

Leaves are falling on the ground, autumn is here.